Undying Love

Subject: Undying Love Fri Sep 12, 2008 12:00 pm

Hi all,

Okay, So I was thinking about Nerine and Alex (lol) and I wanted to write a love poem for Nerine.

In the poem, Nerine is singing for Alex and how much she loves him. Hmmm...it's my first poem in English so it might not be that good:

Every night I sleep

And every night I dream

I hear you calling my name

And when I turn around and see

You going away from me

Tears come down my face

And I yell for you to come back for me

Yet you keep going away

And I keep running for you to come again

Wishing that you would hear me

Wishing that you would listen to me

But then I wake up in fear

Sweat coming down with my tears

And then I wish it was just a dream

I look at the stars and pray

That one day we would meet again

And you would forgive me for my deeds

For I have never seen

Or met a kinder person than you are for me

My love for you will grow day by day

And even if you left me away

You will always be in my heart

For you are the person I admire the most

Hmmm, it's not really good but I think it's okay for being my first poem in English. ^^

(Hey Alex, did you read that? Wink

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Subject: Re: Undying Love Fri Sep 12, 2008 12:08 pm

That is very deep sister...very Romantically deep...

I LOVE IT! I love you

Subject: Re: Undying Love Fri Sep 12, 2008 12:27 pm

Aw, thanks Omega, glad you like it. Smile

Subject: Re: Undying Love Fri Sep 12, 2008 12:36 pm

Teehee *winks* Cause you know its true ^_^

Subject: Re: Undying Love Sat Sep 13, 2008 12:02 am

That's a nice poem, Love. Very sweet. Smile

And yup, Alex read it. He's blushing at the moment. Wink

Subject: Re: Undying Love Sat Sep 13, 2008 4:10 am

lol Thanks, Phoenix.

(Psss, Alex, I have plans for you and Nerine. Just wait for me. Wink

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Subject: Re: Undying Love Sat Sep 13, 2008 5:44 am

LOVE!!!! i totally LOVE it.

Subject: Re: Undying Love Sat Sep 13, 2008 7:49 am

Thanks Aya. Smile

Subject: Re: Undying Love Sat Sep 13, 2008 4:35 pm

Hehe. Im guessing anyone wants to marry her wonderful poem?

Its very nice, though i commented it before. i give it:

10/10/10

Subject: Re: Undying Love Sat Sep 13, 2008 11:37 pm

Well, to be honest since I don't realy like poem--esspecialy love poem (I got C- whenever I try to write one, since I don't realy like it), sorry Love I think the score is C+ or something (+mark since it's your first time writing it).

Well, no offens, but well you can think it as a dumb critic from a dumb person.

Subject: Re: Undying Love Fri Sep 07, 2012 2:54 pm

You could turn it into a neat Anime Music Video. It will definitely work! Very Happy

I like the sweet melodious ring it has.
Make sure it won't be your last effort, Luv. You'll rock in no time Cool

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